Two haiku on sleeping.
while dreaming it makes
perfect sense until dawn breaks
and shadows awake
—–
we share this sleep in
conversation silently
forgotten by dawn
a breath of sleep(lessness)
more sleepy breaths from the poets at one deep breath.
May 07
one deep breath: sleep
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8 comments
blondie
7 May, 2007 at 6:28 pm (UTC -7) Link to this comment
I really like these haiku. I think you have captured sleep perfectly.
Colorful Prose
7 May, 2007 at 7:48 pm (UTC -7) Link to this comment
How true. Trying to explain dreams just sometimes seems impossible. You have to be there.
Crafty Green Poet
7 May, 2007 at 8:22 pm (UTC -7) Link to this comment
Oh it is so true, dreams make perfect sense and then you wake up…
Sandy
7 May, 2007 at 10:47 pm (UTC -7) Link to this comment
So true! I wonder why that is?
Patois
8 May, 2007 at 8:25 am (UTC -7) Link to this comment
I so like the first one, but the second one draws me in. Marvelous, that.
Tammy
8 May, 2007 at 10:06 am (UTC -7) Link to this comment
That last one was a perfect way to describe a dream.
Unfolding Rose
8 May, 2007 at 7:30 pm (UTC -7) Link to this comment
i often feel as if my dreams make 'perfect sense' and it is life that is full of shadows, so I loved your first haiku, and enjoyed the quiet feel to the second one.
Megan
8 May, 2007 at 11:47 pm (UTC -7) Link to this comment
yes your words are so true. We wake up and a shade falls down between the two places. so well done.